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11-11-2005, 02:56 AM | #1 |
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Run (new poem)
Fleeing from myself, I run away
Run away from my problems Problems I face each day Hopelessness no greeting me Greeting me with open arms People do not understand, they don't see See that maybe I feel Maybe I bleed Let music be my shield Let music be my escape from the world Running faster now Feelings of anger and rage catch up Too many feelings than I can allow Darkness envelops my soul Death the ultimate goal I'm on my knees now Begging for help Where has the world gone? They pass by the week They continue to seek Seeking only their own happiness Letting us fall Letting us fall
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SURROUND ME They say no man’s an island but I tend to disagree I guess they’ve never seen my island, And where it lies at sea A wounded man sounds desperate when he’s lost all his belief Can you look into my eyes and say you won’t betray me Tabula Rasa from The Dark Poet! |
11-11-2005, 11:00 AM | #2 |
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i loved the entire piece but these lines really stuck out people do not understand they dont see that mabey i feel maybe i bleed ...let music be my shield let music be my escape, where has the world gone they pass by the weak they contiue to seek only their own happiness awsome writing sweetheart
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11-11-2005, 11:37 AM | #3 |
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Not original at all. I felt like I had heard every line already. How many times can we write about running away? You need to think more outside of the box.
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The theme may be tired, but maybe it's not tired to Stappissohot. A lot of people write just for catharsis and not necessarily for anything or anyone.
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11-11-2005, 02:12 PM | #5 |
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Thanks....yeah well it wasn't as good as my other one which I really like even though the ;ast part of the other one was kinda plagerized, I can always take that out...but this one at least was original... all of my poems are written about me and my life so....yeah....so the whole thing pretty much is me.....nobody really can see that unless they are me so that's a problem, lol, but thanks
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SURROUND ME They say no man’s an island but I tend to disagree I guess they’ve never seen my island, And where it lies at sea A wounded man sounds desperate when he’s lost all his belief Can you look into my eyes and say you won’t betray me Tabula Rasa from The Dark Poet! |
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That's true and if she likes it, then it is all good and I'm happy for her. But if she wants other people to like it--which is sort of implied when one puts it online--I'm just giving my opinion of it.
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11-12-2005, 02:57 AM | #7 |
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I don't like it that much, I have made like 20 like it.....
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11-12-2005, 11:03 AM | #8 |
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lol not a problem your welcome again sweetietarts
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11-12-2005, 01:34 PM | #9 |
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.....oooookkkkk......lol
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SURROUND ME They say no man’s an island but I tend to disagree I guess they’ve never seen my island, And where it lies at sea A wounded man sounds desperate when he’s lost all his belief Can you look into my eyes and say you won’t betray me Tabula Rasa from The Dark Poet! |
11-12-2005, 05:59 PM | #10 |
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ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo kkkkkk
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11-13-2005, 02:16 AM | #11 |
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lol....*eats mint chocolate chip ice cream* so what was this post about? lol....*grabs ice cream box* mine, alllllllll mine, ok fine I'll share *hands over some* I think I'm the only one who likes this flavor.....
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Okkkkkkkkkkkkkkk the post remains a mystery k is a word i use for comfort Like the krispy Creammmmmmmmmmmmmmm I love andes the york peppermint patty i really dont like that flavor Ice Cream i like cookie dough and rocky Road butter pecan Homemade Blueberry Peauntbutter and Split those are my faves
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Lol.... I like Who's Line Is It Anyway....the show.... my fave quote is this....
"Colin what comes to mind when I say scree?" Ryan ".....Sandpaper!" Colin LOL!!!! ahahahaha sooo funny, I love that quote!
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i never whatched that show what a dorky idea so i cant recall that episode to be honest with you the only thing on tv i whatch aside from music videos Is Sponge Bob I him and the discovery channel when something intruges me and the weather channel it calms my nerves
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I like Lost, That's So Raven, Most Haunted, and Scariest Places On Earth
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SURROUND ME They say no man’s an island but I tend to disagree I guess they’ve never seen my island, And where it lies at sea A wounded man sounds desperate when he’s lost all his belief Can you look into my eyes and say you won’t betray me Tabula Rasa from The Dark Poet! |
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