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Old 06-08-2004, 10:12 PM   #1
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Poem To End The World (please reply to this one)

Poem To End The World ©2004

I have something to tell you, but I'm too afraid to speak
I want to hold you up, but I'm far too broken and weak

My broken and scaled wings, they burn
I'm falling faster with every second gone by
I would go, but I feel its not my turn
And I cant help, but question why I even try
I know I'm bound to chains that will only hold us down
But I will whisper a prayer and give you a kiss
Until its time that I hit the ground
I will carry you with my hopeless wish
That maybe you could carry on for me in this chaos
Hold tight to me as I fall farther from you
Tear me up because I know I'm already lost
And that there is nothing I can do
To help you to put your trust back into me
Because I know that I lost all I fought to save
No matter what I do the blind can still see
That I shoved myself into this hollow grave

I want to hold you in my arms and watch as the world dies
To hide away where no one can hear our cries

© Stuff This Good Don't Need Titles Publishing Inc. 2004
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Old 06-09-2004, 12:12 AM   #2
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Ok You Got It Seeks I loved the Last Line
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Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything
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Old 06-09-2004, 09:23 PM   #3
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thanks.....why does no one else reply? Everyone think I suck all of the sudden?
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Old 06-09-2004, 09:39 PM   #4
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Hell no, MrSeeker...Just haven't had that much time on the bb the last couple of days. I do like it very much.

My favorite lines:

I would go, but I feel its not my turn
And I cant help, but question why I even try

You really can paint quite a bleak picture. Well done, as usual!
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Old 06-09-2004, 10:30 PM   #5
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Thanks. Kerrie was it? anywayz,yea,I still need my newsletter put out,hehe...thanks alot
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Old 06-10-2004, 04:13 PM   #6
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MrSeeker...
awesome writing... ...kinda touched a chord...
really enjoyed reading that...

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Old 06-10-2004, 05:49 PM   #7
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Quote: (Originally Posted by MrSeeker) Thanks. Kerrie was it? anywayz,yea,I still need my newsletter put out,hehe...thanks alot
Close enough (Kerri )
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Old 06-11-2004, 10:03 PM   #8
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Thanks,Im glad you enjoyed it
Whoops, sorry Kerri!!!! I knew it was something like that,hehe.
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Old 06-13-2004, 01:54 AM   #9
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I think you're copyright is funny lol. ;. For the piece of work, put together very well. I love the lines,
"No matter what I do the blind can still see
That I shoved myself into this hollow grave"

Deep, very deep, something I value in your writing. Great job with keeping it up throughout your various works. I still like Kimberly and I believe it was called Beautiful. You have a way to write w/o limits and that gave you the great potential you own now.
BTW, I'm still around. Just off and on since it's summer. You can email if you wish. Or, tell me when you'll be on AOL. Hope to hear from you soon. Maybe another work by us both would be cool too. Ttyl.
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thank you so much Kim
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