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Alter Shredder · 12-30-2003, 09:15 AM

This is my newest. I am not quite liking the way parts came together but I know thinking about it is not good when it comes to lyrics. Umm, anyway tell me what ya think and if you have any suggestions I am willing to take them.

-not yet named but im thinking Restless Soul-

Clouds and gray swirling in the eyes
freedom and serenity are no longer yours
you seem to be fooling everyone, even yourself

as the storm begins to take form
the lightning flashes and crackles inside your mind

Your eyes, oh they tell a story,
one that no one knows
those eyes are the gateway to
your soul, your restless soul

screaming inside, i know you are
further away you drift (from all you know)
trying to hide the pain inside
blind to all emotion
you are breaking down
silently those eyes beg for help

as the storm begins to take form
the lightning flashes and crackles inside your mind

Your eyes, oh they tell a story,
one that no one knows
those eyes are the gateway to
your soul, your restless soul

what you cant say, is clear to me
your soul has been exposed
I read your eyes, It is over now
no need for pain, wash it all away

JulieCitySlicker · 12-30-2003, 02:31 PM

That was good Iced

Creed_Defaultgirl · 12-30-2003, 03:24 PM

I think it was great.

MrSeeker · 12-30-2003, 05:01 PM

Yea, that was good

creedsister · 12-30-2003, 05:50 PM

Iced that one was great~`I know you are further away drift from all you know~~liked that line~`

~What You Cant Say Is Clear To Me Your Soul Has Been exposed I Read Your Eyes Its Over Now No Need For Pain WHASH IT ALL AWAY~~~Killer Loved it

Dogstar · 12-30-2003, 07:10 PM

SWEET, Iced!

This verse really got to me:

screaming inside, i know you are
further away you drift (from all you know)
trying to hide the pain inside
blind to all emotion
you are breaking down
silently those eyes beg for help

Excellent!

12-30-2003, 09:15 AM	#1
Alter Shredder USER INFO » Status: Blue Collar Posts: 599 Joined: Oct 2003 Currently: Offline	no name yet This is my newest. I am not quite liking the way parts came together but I know thinking about it is not good when it comes to lyrics. Umm, anyway tell me what ya think and if you have any suggestions I am willing to take them. -not yet named but im thinking Restless Soul- Clouds and gray swirling in the eyes freedom and serenity are no longer yours you seem to be fooling everyone, even yourself as the storm begins to take form the lightning flashes and crackles inside your mind Your eyes, oh they tell a story, one that no one knows those eyes are the gateway to your soul, your restless soul screaming inside, i know you are further away you drift (from all you know) trying to hide the pain inside blind to all emotion you are breaking down silently those eyes beg for help as the storm begins to take form the lightning flashes and crackles inside your mind Your eyes, oh they tell a story, one that no one knows those eyes are the gateway to your soul, your restless soul what you cant say, is clear to me your soul has been exposed I read your eyes, It is over now no need for pain, wash it all away

12-30-2003, 02:31 PM	#2
JulieCitySlicker USER INFO » Status: Taken Higher Posts: 15,310 Joined: Oct 2002 Currently: Offline	That was good Iced __________________ Oh I'm a wandering soul I'm still walking the line that leads me home alone All I know I still got mountains to climb on my own Enough To Let Me Go-Switchfoot

12-30-2003, 03:24 PM	#3
Creed_Defaultgirl USER INFO » Status: INK'ed Posts: 903 Joined: Nov 2003 Currently: Offline	I think it was great. __________________ "...My beaten heart is in your hands, What I really need is shelter, And a chance to relearn love, Teach me all over, All over to relearn love, Show me again, So I can relearn love, The comfort of your arms around me, Your tender hands caress my head, I lay beside you, I'm not worthy..." Relearn Love~Scott Stapp

12-30-2003, 05:50 PM	#5
creedsister USER INFO » Status: Tree of Wisdom Posts: 8,290 Joined: Oct 2003 Currently: Offline	Iced that one was great~`I know you are further away drift from all you know~~liked that line~` ~What You Cant Say Is Clear To Me Your Soul Has Been exposed I Read Your Eyes Its Over Now No Need For Pain WHASH IT ALL AWAY~~~Killer Loved it __________________ Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything

12-30-2003, 07:10 PM	#6
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,345 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	SWEET, Iced! This verse really got to me: screaming inside, i know you are further away you drift (from all you know) trying to hide the pain inside blind to all emotion you are breaking down silently those eyes beg for help Excellent! __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery.

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