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12-30-2003, 09:15 AM | #1 |
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This is my newest. I am not quite liking the way parts came together but I know thinking about it is not good when it comes to lyrics. Umm, anyway tell me what ya think and if you have any suggestions I am willing to take them.
-not yet named but im thinking Restless Soul- Clouds and gray swirling in the eyes freedom and serenity are no longer yours you seem to be fooling everyone, even yourself as the storm begins to take form the lightning flashes and crackles inside your mind Your eyes, oh they tell a story, one that no one knows those eyes are the gateway to your soul, your restless soul screaming inside, i know you are further away you drift (from all you know) trying to hide the pain inside blind to all emotion you are breaking down silently those eyes beg for help as the storm begins to take form the lightning flashes and crackles inside your mind Your eyes, oh they tell a story, one that no one knows those eyes are the gateway to your soul, your restless soul what you cant say, is clear to me your soul has been exposed I read your eyes, It is over now no need for pain, wash it all away |
12-30-2003, 02:31 PM | #2 |
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That was good Iced
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12-30-2003, 03:24 PM | #3 |
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I think it was great.
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12-30-2003, 05:01 PM | #4 |
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Yea, that was good
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12-30-2003, 05:50 PM | #5 |
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Iced that one was great~`I know you are further away drift from all you know~~liked that line~` ~What You Cant Say Is Clear To Me Your Soul Has Been exposed I Read Your Eyes Its Over Now No Need For Pain WHASH IT ALL AWAY~~~Killer Loved it
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12-30-2003, 07:10 PM | #6 |
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SWEET, Iced!
This verse really got to me: screaming inside, i know you are further away you drift (from all you know) trying to hide the pain inside blind to all emotion you are breaking down silently those eyes beg for help Excellent!
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