Age

njcreedite · 01-22-2004, 11:22 PM

Inside I'm really 22
so full of dreams, promise
and life.

I wear my hair the way I
want and pierce
whatever I like.

I rock to music with
such force it drives
me through the night.

Then the mirror shows
me what is real
what I'm really like.

Age is just a state
of mind and I'll fight
it with all my might.

TeriB19 · 01-23-2004, 12:09 AM

That was TERRIFIC!!! Loved it and I can so relate!!!

Dogstar · 01-23-2004, 12:10 AM

AMEN, nicely done, njcreedite!!!!

Aimee · 01-23-2004, 12:16 PM

I like that. Your poetry is very real, not flowery with hints at what you really mean like mine. That's something I very much appreciate. Keep it up!

Sincirr · 01-23-2004, 12:31 PM

Woooohooo! Amendadat!
Short n to da point. Excellent!

njcreedite · 01-23-2004, 12:53 PM

Teri and I were talking about this poem. She found it positive, as if it was saying "Screw You" to everyone.
I found that pretty cool and can now see how she saw it this way. It wasn't what I was thinking at the time. When I wrote it, I was feeling more like.... bittersweet. What I see in the mirror isn't at all how I feel, but I'm expected to act more like I look and less like I feel. Wrote another about that...but haven't posted it. Didn't like the way it came out.
Anyways...I find it interesting how we all read the samethings and come away with different takes.
Linda

SCOTTSMYMAN · 01-23-2004, 04:27 PM

I LOVED it! I feel like I just want to be 21 again! Great poem Linda!!

njcreedite · 01-23-2004, 11:13 PM

Thanks Kris. Happy you guys like it, but the more I read it the less
I like it. Not a good one, in my opinion.

01-22-2004, 11:22 PM	#1
njcreedite USER INFO » Status: INK'ed Posts: 808 Joined: Jan 2003 Currently: Offline	Age Inside I'm really 22 so full of dreams, promise and life. I wear my hair the way I want and pierce whatever I like. I rock to music with such force it drives me through the night. Then the mirror shows me what is real what I'm really like. Age is just a state of mind and I'll fight it with all my might. __________________ eddie vedder quote:: We were both singers. Chris Cornell The first time we played he came to this little club and he told me that it was really good and he was thankful that I was there and that I was who I was, or something really nice, but the whole time he was saying this, he didn't realize but he was standing under a black light, and his teeth were glowing and his eyes were glowing. I remember it as my first conversation with Satan ..."

01-23-2004, 12:09 AM	#2
TeriB19 Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Saving Grace Posts: 12,437 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	That was TERRIFIC!!! Loved it and I can so relate!!! __________________ MK: We're never gonna have the Super Bowl of Scott Stapp vs. Myles Kennedy in a sing-off - it's ridiculous. SP: Actually, we are setting that up. MT: It was in your contract when you signed up with us.

01-23-2004, 12:10 AM	#3
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,348 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	AMEN, nicely done, njcreedite!!!! __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery.

01-23-2004, 12:16 PM	#4
Aimee USER INFO » Status: INK'ed Posts: 822 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	I like that. Your poetry is very real, not flowery with hints at what you really mean like mine. That's something I very much appreciate. Keep it up! __________________ The capacity for passion is both cruel and divine. George Sand - 1834

01-23-2004, 12:53 PM	#6
njcreedite USER INFO » Status: INK'ed Posts: 808 Joined: Jan 2003 Currently: Offline	Teri and I were talking about this poem. She found it positive, as if it was saying "Screw You" to everyone. I found that pretty cool and can now see how she saw it this way. It wasn't what I was thinking at the time. When I wrote it, I was feeling more like.... bittersweet. What I see in the mirror isn't at all how I feel, but I'm expected to act more like I look and less like I feel. Wrote another about that...but haven't posted it. Didn't like the way it came out. Anyways...I find it interesting how we all read the samethings and come away with different takes. Linda __________________ eddie vedder quote:: We were both singers. Chris Cornell The first time we played he came to this little club and he told me that it was really good and he was thankful that I was there and that I was who I was, or something really nice, but the whole time he was saying this, he didn't realize but he was standing under a black light, and his teeth were glowing and his eyes were glowing. I remember it as my first conversation with Satan ..."

01-23-2004, 11:13 PM	#8
njcreedite USER INFO » Status: INK'ed Posts: 808 Joined: Jan 2003 Currently: Offline	Thanks Kris. Happy you guys like it, but the more I read it the less I like it. Not a good one, in my opinion. __________________ eddie vedder quote:: We were both singers. Chris Cornell The first time we played he came to this little club and he told me that it was really good and he was thankful that I was there and that I was who I was, or something really nice, but the whole time he was saying this, he didn't realize but he was standing under a black light, and his teeth were glowing and his eyes were glowing. I remember it as my first conversation with Satan ..."

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