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10-10-2004, 10:08 PM | #1 |
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Another phone call that’s unreturned Another side of my pride is burned Cant you see that this hurts From the kiss you pushed away You don’t even need to say Because ill say it first I am so sick of this place I cant stand my own face And I hate that this hurts I hate that I’m open While You don’t even see how much you mean How far in you’ve seen I miss you And I should do nothing but forget you But I cant So I’m left to wonder Because Iv been replaced with another What’s left that we can possibly be Did you even leave any of me? But the pain reminds me you didn’t That we didn’t make it And this will kill me |
10-10-2004, 10:52 PM | #2 |
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I liked it i dont know what to call it
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Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything |
10-10-2004, 11:06 PM | #3 |
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very emotional writing...a thought...what do you think of "I've Always Known"...
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10-11-2004, 12:18 PM | #4 |
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that would be a nice one
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Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything |
10-12-2004, 12:45 AM | #5 |
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That was a really good poem.How about "This really hurts" or "I'll miss you"
tell me what cha think.that poem again rocked |
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I like "Ill miss you" , feels right. and thanks for the kind words
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your welcome and thanx
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