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07-11-2003, 10:19 PM
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FOUND, a poem (All comments, suggestions welcome!)
Somber days of agony,
relunctantly, give way to serene winds of victory. Sun-kissed skies erase opaque nights, revealing inner beauty's sight. Brutality of endless emotional rattles have lost these push and pull battles. Beauty has, finally, won and pounds the gavel. Witness jubilation's magnificent sound. At last, peace of this restless soul has been, graciously, found. ©2003 L.A.
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07-11-2003, 11:42 PM
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Welcome
 Let me the first to say welcome to Creative Corner...I am always glad to met fellow writers and I think we are all really kind with our comments so look foward to seeing more from you...Your poem is simply Beautiful..in such a short span it gives such a feeling of depth.. "Brutality of endless emotional rattles have lost these push and pull battles." And the imagery... "Sun-kissed skies erase opaque nights" Good work...you make us all look like amateurs...please feel free to read everyone's threads..I know I appreciate critics, I think everyone here does..my threads are Caution-Dark scary stuff and the Brave Thread... again Welcome!!! 
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07-12-2003, 12:50 AM
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Hello,
Thank you for the very warm and kind welcome to the creative corner!! I do look forward to reading the threads. I am so pleased you liked my poem. I have been working on it for awhile. I wasn't sure if it was ready for viewing, but your assessment of it eases my worries. Thank you for that!! ~Honey~ 
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07-12-2003, 10:03 AM
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Wow, I love your poem, Honey.
 I especially love "Sun-kissed skies erase opaque nights, revealing inner beauty's sight." and the last 3 lines....just beautiful.
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07-12-2003, 02:00 PM
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Hello Sheila,
Thank you so much!! I am so happy you liked my poem!!   ~Honey~
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You're welcome.
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07-18-2003, 01:57 PM
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I loved it Honey
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Hey Julie,
I am so glad you liked my poem!! I truly appreciate you taking the time to read and comment on my work.!!  ~Honey~
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