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11-08-2005, 07:55 PM | #31 |
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Dont know how to edit a post/thread????
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So while I'm turning in my sheets And once again, I cannot sleep Walk out the door and up the street Look at the stars Look at the stars, falling down, And I wonder where, did I go wrong. "I know a girl (Gio ) She puts the color inside of my world" Girls become lovers who turn into mothers So mothers be good to your daughters too |
11-08-2005, 09:35 PM | #32 |
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But the Title always refuses to change for me...
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11-09-2005, 04:58 PM | #33 |
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Yeah, I tried to change one thread I had posted in the political banter but it only worked for the title INSIDE the post (hope you get me!) you know? but not for the thread title ... so you CAN add a title (Five weeks- not 'five weeks more'!) in your first post here... well, at least, try...
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11-09-2005, 05:43 PM | #34 |
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hmmm, it was ok. It wasn't anything I haven't already seen before. But dude, seriously, you are taking away from it piece by piece by trying to please everyone. That's not cool. You should never change something you wrote like that unless you plan to put it to a song, otherwise it's just lame. It's not really your work of art if you change it again and again.
It just loses it's meaning and it's raw emotion. Poetry needs that raw emotion.
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Uncertain???...trying to please everyone??? LOL... UNCERTAIN: post the other song you have...
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Meh, the one stanza I got rid of I meant to get rid of a while back... not sure how it survived so long.
And if I'm not going to change it... why post it?
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Well, someone says they don't like a certain part and he makes some excuse for it being the way it is, that or changes it all together.
What do you call it?
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Excuse? I don't make any excuses. If someone were to say they didn't like the first line I'd tell them they have no poetic or songwriting intelligence. But the stanza I got rid of was bad, so I got rid of it. Generally I leave in the parts I am unsure of, see what other people think, and that helps me make a decision on whether to keep it or not.
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"If someone were to say they didn't like the first line I'd tell them they have no poetic or songwriting intelligence."
Obviously you do...
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i knew you would find that one Kev more to your liken
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*Is confused*
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Well...cant you see the 'element' irony above?
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I truly love the lyrics.
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