Shattered View

Alter Shredder · 11-06-2003, 10:30 PM

Shattered View
sitting and pondering
not sure about my life
nothing is what it used to be
the brokenness of all i used to know
now i know not what i see

running in circles
trying to find a place of refuge
afraid of what is out there
of what might be had

staring through a window
my shattered view all i have left
confusion my only friend
why has it come to this

afraid to let you in,
don't want to show my scars of within
only to be broken again

winding through a maze that never ends
the only way out is to break these walls
i must break free from the labyrinth of my mind
and a life of hidden tragedy

pain and suffering, the world over
trapped in our own misery
but no healing to be found
all we have is shattered view to look through

This is one of my first works. I am just looking for your thoughts/opinions and any guidance you have to offer. Thanks-Iced

JulieCitySlicker · 11-06-2003, 10:44 PM

Wow! Iced that was really good

I enjoyed reading your poem!

hide · 11-06-2003, 10:49 PM

that is really good summed up some of what i've been feeling lately! great stuff

creedsister · 11-06-2003, 10:59 PM

check your pms

creedsister · 11-06-2003, 11:00 PM

check your pms

Alter Shredder · 11-07-2003, 09:29 AM

i checked the pms and there was nothing there, I wonder if something is a little off in the system?

Alter Shredder · 11-07-2003, 09:35 AM

Thank you for the positive responses. I'll see if i can keep them coming, but it takes a while.

SCOTTSMYMAN · 11-07-2003, 12:01 PM

Awesome ,Iced. Keep then coming because I love reading everybodies poems and songs!! You have a great talent for words.

Dogstar · 11-08-2003, 10:26 PM

Iced, nicely done...I especially liked this verse:

afraid to let you in,
don't want to show my scars of within
only to be broken again

very honest. Thanks for sharing, and do keep them coming. I'm enjoying reading everybody's stuff, too!

Creed_Defaultgirl · 11-08-2003, 11:41 PM

You are very talented! keep the poems coming in. I really enjoyed.

Siana · 11-30-2003, 09:12 AM

awesome!

11-06-2003, 10:44 PM	#2
JulieCitySlicker USER INFO » Status: Taken Higher Posts: 15,310 Joined: Oct 2002 Currently: Offline	Wow! Iced that was really good I enjoyed reading your poem! __________________ Oh I'm a wandering soul I'm still walking the line that leads me home alone All I know I still got mountains to climb on my own Enough To Let Me Go-Switchfoot

11-06-2003, 10:49 PM	#3
hide USER INFO » Status: INK'ed Posts: 919 Joined: Feb 2003 Currently: Offline	that is really good summed up some of what i've been feeling lately! great stuff __________________ come on all you PJ loving Creeders come and look and also post at the busiest and funniest board around (excluding here of course LOL) http://forums.pearljam.com

11-06-2003, 10:59 PM	#4
creedsister USER INFO » Status: Tree of Wisdom Posts: 8,290 Joined: Oct 2003 Currently: Offline	check your pms __________________ Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything

11-06-2003, 11:00 PM	#5
creedsister USER INFO » Status: Tree of Wisdom Posts: 8,290 Joined: Oct 2003 Currently: Offline	check your pms __________________ Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything

11-08-2003, 10:26 PM	#9
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,345 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	Iced, nicely done...I especially liked this verse: afraid to let you in, don't want to show my scars of within only to be broken again very honest. Thanks for sharing, and do keep them coming. I'm enjoying reading everybody's stuff, too! __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery.

11-06-2003, 10:30 PM	#1
Alter Shredder USER INFO » Status: Blue Collar Posts: 599 Joined: Oct 2003 Currently: Offline	Shattered View sitting and pondering not sure about my life nothing is what it used to be the brokenness of all i used to know now i know not what i see running in circles trying to find a place of refuge afraid of what is out there of what might be had staring through a window my shattered view all i have left confusion my only friend why has it come to this afraid to let you in, don't want to show my scars of within only to be broken again winding through a maze that never ends the only way out is to break these walls i must break free from the labyrinth of my mind and a life of hidden tragedy pain and suffering, the world over trapped in our own misery but no healing to be found all we have is shattered view to look through This is one of my first works. I am just looking for your thoughts/opinions and any guidance you have to offer. Thanks-Iced

11-07-2003, 09:29 AM	#6
Alter Shredder USER INFO » Status: Blue Collar Posts: 599 Joined: Oct 2003 Currently: Offline	i checked the pms and there was nothing there, I wonder if something is a little off in the system?

11-07-2003, 09:35 AM	#7
Alter Shredder USER INFO » Status: Blue Collar Posts: 599 Joined: Oct 2003 Currently: Offline	Thank you for the positive responses. I'll see if i can keep them coming, but it takes a while.

11-08-2003, 11:41 PM	#10
Creed_Defaultgirl USER INFO » Status: INK'ed Posts: 903 Joined: Nov 2003 Currently: Offline	You are very talented! keep the poems coming in. I really enjoyed. __________________ "...My beaten heart is in your hands, What I really need is shelter, And a chance to relearn love, Teach me all over, All over to relearn love, Show me again, So I can relearn love, The comfort of your arms around me, Your tender hands caress my head, I lay beside you, I'm not worthy..." Relearn Love~Scott Stapp

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