" What Are We Supposed To Do "

[TheGreatDivide]

You take them away form us
So they don't go through the pain
But what about the pain we feel
Hooray for a child that makes it though

What are we supposed to do
Now they are gone
No more memories to make ( come back to this after each stanza )

This gift yu gave me, takes a toll
On my ever sorrowful soul

[metalanus]

Hooray for a child that makes it through- Listen to MOP lately?

[TheGreatDivide]

sorry to use but it came naturally... yeah right before i wrote it, anyways is it any good

[metalanus]

its not your best . I like the title and the last part

[Rocketqueen]

yes those are the lines i liked too , yea its good and the opening As well

[TheGreatDivide]

here is the actual poem.. i think i hit enter and it cut it off

You take them away form us
So they don't go through the pain
But what about the pain we feel
Hooray for a child that makes it though

What are we supposed to do
Now they are gone
No more memories to make ( come back to this after each stanza )

This gift you gave me, takes a toll
On my ever sorrowful soul
We pray for the broken hearted
Babies and elders leaving
My mind and soul can't take anymore

They never have to say sorry
Never going to marry
Never to see the light of day
or the coldness of night

[Rocketqueen]

ok i liked the the last line too its got a ring too it well written damn your good