Mind Shaft

Dogstar · 11-07-2003, 03:46 AM

A picture’s weathered corners
Image burned in mind
Frozen in a landscape
Of the colors left behind

Your eyes they hold the candle
Of what you thought you claimed
The flame no longer lingers
And there’s no one left to blame

I knew you when you cared
I knew you when you bothered
I wish you hadn’t disappeared
I wish you hadn’t mattered

The cards lie on the table
The money’s in the pot
It’s your turn to make a move
So give your hand a shot

Memories your enemy
A penny for those thoughts
Drive you to insanity
And test what will you brought

I knew you when you cared
I knew you when you bothered
I wish you hadn’t disappeared
I wish you hadn’t mattered

The dust and dirt are piled high
The weeds have overtaken
Broken glass coats the floor
The tattered walls are flaking

House of horrors opens up
The ghosts they dance with glee
You’re invited once again
To greet the sun or flee

I knew you when you cared
I knew you when you bothered
I wish you hadn’t reappeared
I wish you hadn’t flattered

Alter Shredder · 11-07-2003, 08:52 AM

I like it. I have had similar feelings. You have skill when it comes to writing music lyrics Dogstar.

SCOTTSMYMAN · 11-07-2003, 11:59 AM

Kerri, thanks for sharing. They just keep getting better!!

Dogstar · 11-07-2003, 01:31 PM

Thanks tons, you guys. Now, if only I could write the music part, LOL...

SmilinSkullRing · 11-08-2003, 03:34 AM

Niiiiiice!!

Alter Shredder · 11-08-2003, 07:35 AM

Dogstar, do you have a website with all your other material?

MrSeeker · 11-08-2003, 04:17 PM

Good stuff!!!

Dogstar · 11-08-2003, 06:41 PM

Thanks, everyone!

Iced, I do not have a web site. I only started doing this about a year or so ago, so I don't have a big collection or anything...just about 10 or 12 at the moment. The ones here have been written in the last two weeks or so.

Sheila63 · 11-08-2003, 08:58 PM

Awesome poem, Kerri.

You're a great writer and you're inspiring me to sit down and do some writing. I've done some journaling lately but haven't written any poems for awhile.

Dogstar · 11-08-2003, 10:29 PM

Thank you, Sheila! This is like pay it forward. Aimee's poems got me to get out the pen and paper and now you're doing the same. That's great, Sheila! It's such a wonderful outlet!

whitebird · 11-09-2003, 08:13 PM

Dogstar, I rented the movie Pay It Forward, after it was mentioned quite a while ago on this board, perhaps by you. I think the thought is a wonderful concept. Please share more or your poetry with us. I enjoy learning the thoughts behind the person.

whitebird

TeriB19 · 11-10-2003, 05:52 AM

Quite simply, outstanding.

Sheila63 · 11-10-2003, 04:07 PM

</div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (Dogstar @ 11-08-2003 10:29 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> Thank you, Sheila! This is like pay it forward. Aimee's poems got me to get out the pen and paper and now you're doing the same. That's great, Sheila! It's such a wonderful outlet! [/b][/quote]
You're welcome.

I agree with you, writing is a wonderful outlet. I find that it helps me to figure things out that are going on in my life as well.

Dogstar · 11-13-2003, 04:42 AM

It sure does, Sheila! It can clarify and purify...It's a healthier way to purge, IMO

...

Thanks, whitebird and Teri!

Creed_Defaultgirl · 11-15-2003, 10:51 PM

This is awesome!

11-07-2003, 03:46 AM	#1
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,345 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	A picture’s weathered corners Image burned in mind Frozen in a landscape Of the colors left behind Your eyes they hold the candle Of what you thought you claimed The flame no longer lingers And there’s no one left to blame I knew you when you cared I knew you when you bothered I wish you hadn’t disappeared I wish you hadn’t mattered The cards lie on the table The money’s in the pot It’s your turn to make a move So give your hand a shot Memories your enemy A penny for those thoughts Drive you to insanity And test what will you brought I knew you when you cared I knew you when you bothered I wish you hadn’t disappeared I wish you hadn’t mattered The dust and dirt are piled high The weeds have overtaken Broken glass coats the floor The tattered walls are flaking House of horrors opens up The ghosts they dance with glee You’re invited once again To greet the sun or flee I knew you when you cared I knew you when you bothered I wish you hadn’t reappeared I wish you hadn’t flattered __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery.

11-07-2003, 01:31 PM	#4
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,345 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	Thanks tons, you guys. Now, if only I could write the music part, LOL... __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery.

11-08-2003, 06:41 PM	#8
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,345 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	Thanks, everyone! Iced, I do not have a web site. I only started doing this about a year or so ago, so I don't have a big collection or anything...just about 10 or 12 at the moment. The ones here have been written in the last two weeks or so. __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery.

11-08-2003, 08:58 PM	#9
Sheila63 USER INFO » Status: Opened My Eyes Posts: 5,748 Joined: Dec 2002 Currently: Offline	Awesome poem, Kerri. You're a great writer and you're inspiring me to sit down and do some writing. I've done some journaling lately but haven't written any poems for awhile. __________________ I was selfish, but you still loved me You gave the greatest gift of all And you set me free Relearn Love

11-08-2003, 10:29 PM	#10
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,345 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	Thank you, Sheila! This is like pay it forward. Aimee's poems got me to get out the pen and paper and now you're doing the same. That's great, Sheila! It's such a wonderful outlet! __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery.

11-07-2003, 08:52 AM	#2
Alter Shredder USER INFO » Status: Blue Collar Posts: 599 Joined: Oct 2003 Currently: Offline	I like it. I have had similar feelings. You have skill when it comes to writing music lyrics Dogstar.

11-08-2003, 07:35 AM	#6
Alter Shredder USER INFO » Status: Blue Collar Posts: 599 Joined: Oct 2003 Currently: Offline	Dogstar, do you have a website with all your other material?

11-09-2003, 08:13 PM	#11
whitebird USER INFO » Status: Blue Collar Posts: 630 Joined: Feb 2003 Currently: Offline	Dogstar, I rented the movie Pay It Forward, after it was mentioned quite a while ago on this board, perhaps by you. I think the thought is a wonderful concept. Please share more or your poetry with us. I enjoy learning the thoughts behind the person. whitebird

11-10-2003, 05:52 AM	#12
TeriB19 Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Saving Grace Posts: 12,439 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	Quite simply, outstanding. __________________ MK: We're never gonna have the Super Bowl of Scott Stapp vs. Myles Kennedy in a sing-off - it's ridiculous. SP: Actually, we are setting that up. MT: It was in your contract when you signed up with us.

11-10-2003, 04:07 PM	#13
Sheila63 USER INFO » Status: Opened My Eyes Posts: 5,748 Joined: Dec 2002 Currently: Offline	<!--QuoteBegin-Dogstar+11-08-2003 10:29 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (Dogstar @ 11-08-2003 10:29 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> Thank you, Sheila! This is like pay it forward. Aimee's poems got me to get out the pen and paper and now you're doing the same. That's great, Sheila! It's such a wonderful outlet! [/b][/quote] You're welcome. I agree with you, writing is a wonderful outlet. I find that it helps me to figure things out that are going on in my life as well. __________________ I was selfish, but you still loved me You gave the greatest gift of all And you set me free Relearn Love

11-13-2003, 04:42 AM	#14
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,345 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	It sure does, Sheila! It can clarify and purify...It's a healthier way to purge, IMO ... Thanks, whitebird and Teri! __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery.

11-15-2003, 10:51 PM	#15
Creed_Defaultgirl USER INFO » Status: INK'ed Posts: 903 Joined: Nov 2003 Currently: Offline	This is awesome! __________________ "...My beaten heart is in your hands, What I really need is shelter, And a chance to relearn love, Teach me all over, All over to relearn love, Show me again, So I can relearn love, The comfort of your arms around me, Your tender hands caress my head, I lay beside you, I'm not worthy..." Relearn Love~Scott Stapp

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