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12-28-2007, 04:40 AM | #1 |
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The Vision
This vision in lily white shimmers under a golden night
He can see her, though he cannot feel her. Summer showers soak moonlit flowers Amid boardwalk strolls and highway tolls Paperback sessions read late-night confessions Of white castles and graduation tassels Crystal clear persuasion Defies an explanation The answers flow fast Through the bottom of a glass Cotton candy sweetens kettle corn Apple brandy sears a mother’s scorn Peanut shells crack wedding bells Daydream spells ride sea-foam swells Silent screams pierce ultra high beams Reality check finds a noose round the neck Time to swallow The rest will follow Praise the lord Pull the cord
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that was brilliant piece A brilliant piece and very well written it was brilliant as well as one intriguing
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Thank ya, sis, as always
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your welcome Dog your potery shows forth so much brillance its a great wrting skill that shows one as able to put together just about anything in all presepctives and theroys coming from diffrent potery i really like where you went with this line.........Crystal Clear Persusaion Defiles An Explanation Through A Bottom Of A Glass, Also The Opening Lines......was so sureal u could just feel why potery is potery And cotton candy sweetens kettle corn Apple brandy sears a mothers scorn....those lines to me are so red hot chillie pepprish Good Job Dog
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Hahaha, RHCP, cool! Thank you, sis. You are too kind!
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your welcome Dog
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