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Dogstar 12-28-2007 04:40 AM

The Vision
 
This vision in lily white shimmers under a golden night
He can see her, though he cannot feel her.

Summer showers soak moonlit flowers
Amid boardwalk strolls and highway tolls

Paperback sessions read late-night confessions
Of white castles and graduation tassels

Crystal clear persuasion
Defies an explanation
The answers flow fast
Through the bottom of a glass

Cotton candy sweetens kettle corn
Apple brandy sears a mother’s scorn

Peanut shells crack wedding bells
Daydream spells ride sea-foam swells

Silent screams pierce ultra high beams
Reality check finds a noose round the neck

Time to swallow
The rest will follow
Praise the lord
Pull the cord

TrulyAmazing 12-28-2007 07:41 PM

Re: The Vision
 
that was brilliant piece A brilliant piece and very well written it was brilliant as well as one intriguing

Dogstar 01-05-2008 01:22 AM

Re: The Vision
 
Thank ya, sis, as always :)

TrulyAmazing 01-05-2008 05:27 PM

Re: The Vision
 
Quote:

Originally Posted by Dogstar
Thank ya, sis, as always :)

your welcome Dog your potery shows forth so much brillance its a great wrting skill that shows one as able to put together just about anything in all presepctives and theroys coming from diffrent potery i really like where you went with this line.........Crystal Clear Persusaion Defiles An Explanation Through A Bottom Of A Glass, Also The Opening Lines......was so sureal u could just feel why potery is potery And cotton candy sweetens kettle corn Apple brandy sears a mothers scorn....those lines to me are so red hot chillie pepprish :) Good Job Dog

Dogstar 01-05-2008 06:27 PM

Re: The Vision
 
Hahaha, RHCP, cool! Thank you, sis. :) You are too kind!

TrulyAmazing 01-06-2008 08:38 PM

Re: The Vision
 
Quote:

Originally Posted by Dogstar
Hahaha, RHCP, cool! Thank you, sis. :) You are too kind!

your welcome Dog


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