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Dead whispers
what is left that can make me whole
the theft of my life and my soul they stole nothing feels right and nothing feels real my spirit bleeds black and is to dead to heal death kisses my face and holds me so tight its breath smells of pain and its eyes void of light it whispers in my ear the things that it took it looks In my eyes with a dark hallow look seeking my pain that swells up inside seeking in vein for all there has died what did I do to deserve what Iv been given I know I cant hurt because that’s how he is driven if I show that im aching he’ll feed on the pain and if I fight for my life tears come like rain but tears I have shed time after time weathered and torn and fear in my mind I am so close to dead to fall all the way I must raise my head and live through today |
That doesnt read right does it? i cant figure out whats wrong w/it..... i think from "What did i do to deserve what iv been givin" its off all the way to the end, any suggestions?
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It sounds good to me :D
Very emotional and heartfelt, I liked it a lot :) |
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