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You Selfish
You cry out the bullet came from nowhere
tumbling over as you gasp for air you exlaim why has thou forsaken me you shot yourself in the foot your wounds self-inflicted you selfish..... Every table you've sat at You have left a pillar of salt Those that turn back and wish they could be with you Are left with the taste of your poison asp lips you selfish..... Your inflicted me when i was but a child my innocence you attempted to steal for months I dreamed off you that night when God would stop the sun how I worshipped your feet how pitied I am how foolish was I to believe to believe you would never change you selfish.... Would you have turned out an angel If your father was not the prince of the power of the air? Or were you born with your talent your talent to inflict pain on those you love? you selfish..... You claim to be a daughter depart for I do not know you a false prophet you are Nadab's fire you shall consume your profane sacrifice take that child away from your cursed breasts you selfish.... You take advantage of everyone around you your conscience singed you stand in the flame but your heart is icy cold you open the portal dragging everyone in you selfish...... I hate that you make feel this way that you instil such hate in my soul you shot me with a mortal wound that day but unlike the others i wouldn't touch you with a ten foot pole you selfish bbbiiitttcchhh that feels better........ Last edited by handmedown : 04-14-2004 at 08:23 AM. |
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oh man i loved that it was like looking at someone i use to know, it made me feel better too by reading its HOMERUN whooooooooo
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WOW!! that was awesome, hide...
these lines were killer: Those that turn back and wish they could be with you Are left with the taste of your poison asp lips you selfish.....
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thanks writing this was very carthaic (sp). i liked the pillar of salt lines myself......
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That feels better...
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That was so rocking man! I LOVED it. Very touching. This is my favorite part: You claim to be a daughter depart for I do not know you a false prophet you are Nadab's fire you shall consume your profane sacrifice take that child away from your cursed breasts you selfish.... Puts tears in my eyes with the image you paint in the words. Do you have any music for you? Seriously though... if not you should, or someone should. Great job!
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thanks heaps for the encouragement, no i am not in a band. as for my voice its good for the shower but its not for public consumption! ![]() ![]() |
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LOL!! Sounds like me! People always tell me when (if!!) I get a band I should sing as well because they are my songs. I'm like, no you haven't heard me sing. ![]() I like these lines: You cry out the bullet came from nowhere tumbling over as you gasp for air But most of all I just like how you end with "you selfish". It just kind of wraps up the song.
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what's the last thing a drummer saids to his bandmates? hey guys can we try one of my songs!
Ah-Ha! The old Ringo Starr complex. Well, you're wrong that record companies don't buy lyrics. Hell, where do you think pop bands get their stuff? You didn't really think they wrote it themselves??? Most of them didn't. There's a huge market for country lyrics too, which is really just a twangy version of rock now-a-days anyway. You should look into it. I know that there is one book in particular called, the Writer's Market for songwriters. Anyway, it doesn't really matter what you do with it, as long as you enjoyed creating it, right? And I certainly enjoyed reading it. Keep it up!
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ah thanks but where would one go to put forward their lyrics? i know the songwriting business is VERY competitive and i thought they wanted complete songs not just lyrics? i can't imagine britney singing Every table you've sat at You have left a pillar of salt |
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HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA,
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