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I traveled the distance
To Mt. Olympus Zeus called upon me To tell you these things "Free them of this dying age Of declining music in quality Enough of this repartee, Free them from this dying age" As I leave I drop on my knees And pray in disbelief In myself and in his ability Oh, I pray to Muse To let me use The power That will set you free (chorus) Face this adversity Crawl from calamity To search for a remedy 'Cause the Gods command you so Bleed from hypocrisy They told me to do this anyway So now I search for for purity To end my suffering age Blood, sweat all over me Tear drops down my cheek Focus all my energy On one opposing force! (end) __________________________________________________ ____________ if theres any problems with the grammar or set-up let me know. i sometimes have problems with these things.
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12-20-2006, 09:21 PM | #2 |
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no comments?
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12-21-2006, 08:14 PM | #3 |
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i cant recall my comments oh yes it reminded me of a {{{silent fire}}} Blood sweat tears all over me tears drops down my cheek focus all my engery on one opposing force, and also it was very well written
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thnx
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welcome
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When NO One Else Can Understand Me When Everything I Do Is Wrong You Give Hope And Consolation You Give Me Strength To Carry On, And Your Always There To Lend A Hand In Everything I Do That The Wonder The WONDER Of You And When You Smile The World Is Brighter YOU Touch My Hand And Im Queen Your KISS To Me Is Worth A Fourtune Your Love For Me Is Everything I,ll Guess I,ll Never Know The Reason Why You Love As You Do Thats Just The Wonder The Wonder Of You |
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your welcome
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When NO One Else Can Understand Me When Everything I Do Is Wrong You Give Hope And Consolation You Give Me Strength To Carry On, And Your Always There To Lend A Hand In Everything I Do That The Wonder The WONDER Of You And When You Smile The World Is Brighter YOU Touch My Hand And Im Queen Your KISS To Me Is Worth A Fourtune Your Love For Me Is Everything I,ll Guess I,ll Never Know The Reason Why You Love As You Do Thats Just The Wonder The Wonder Of You |
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the only thing i like about this is the chorus. everything else sucks,
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no i really liked this one
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11-06-2007, 11:32 PM | #9 |
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atleast someone did. i think the chorus is it's only redeeming value.
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Bleed from hypocrisy They Told Me To Do This AnyWay So now i search for purtiy to end my suffering age blood sweat all over me tear drops down my check focus all my engery one one oposing force ...nagpo after reading the entire thing just my opions it seems tell a story these are the lines that really stuck out again it seems to tell a story Of A Constant Battle With The Gods Of A Reasons all opposing all engery one one opposing force , i, really like the lines free theme of this dying age as well but just trading opions back and forth i really do think good potery needs to be discussed
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thnx. i think i might revise this one day. I don't like the first parts. imo, it just doesnt flow. i don't know, maybe i'm just being my worst critic.
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my little poet friend well i for one like the opening because to me it gave great direction the opening did on where the entire piece was heading thats my opion though yes and about being our worst critic 9 times out of 10 we usally crtisize our kick own our ass enough times we really dont need nobody else to do it for us sometimes im like never mind i,ll do it myself ...i wanna post my new stuff if i ever have time ...
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hmmm....whenever you do, i'll read it.
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haaaaa well i hope so like i said when i get more time i hope to get at least some of it up by the middle of the week hopefully we will see how it goes
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