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aussiecreeder 01-14-2007 07:52 AM

As They Say Goodbye
 
First of all hello to everyone I have not spoken to since.....well a very long time lol. Wrote some song lyrics and thought I would share. I would like some constructive critcism if anyone has any.


Favourite song played,vision of the casket carried away
Breathe the last, one last look above
Regret in hesitation
Words said in desolation
Fonder memories of the road a young woman paved
Your light shining upon the way

Many fish in the sea or so they say
Only one for me, caught one fateful day
As they say goodbye, tell them to shed no tears
Had all a man could ask, when you uttered yes to me that glorious day

Conversation in silence
Far from an abomination
Redundant words said
You were fair and young
And though your rose has faded
It matters not to me

You were always right
In your eyes and mine
All that matters now is I utter those words
That have taken my whole life to find

Discourse with the animals was always your way
Father nature has its own religion
No man chooses when he crashes his last wave

So I go as the chorus plays
Thoughts so hollow as the tears flow
As the church bells ring now
It may seem silly
To believe in something I cannot know
I know this is just goodbye for now

HeavensOnFire 01-16-2007 11:16 PM

Re: As They Say Goodbye
 
I found this strong potery of more than passion but strong in expeticting and learning ones nature has they grow and when they fade to and fro , i love the revealing structure in this one, and i loved and like worshpied the engraving of the depth structure, of it it stayed in a strong balance for mat like in the depths of the need and the heart of the writer, very un like your other wrtings, that spoke of parables of so much human nature and parables, and trying to avoid the deep issuies, :) damn haaaaaaaaaaa you are amazing writer,

Dogstar 01-17-2007 11:35 AM

Re: As They Say Goodbye
 
Nice job, hide! And nice to see you around.

HeavensOnFire 01-22-2007 11:42 PM

Re: As They Say Goodbye
 
this was good stuff man you should have done a copyright, but i loved it,


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