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Creed_Defaultgirl 12-30-2003 01:37 AM

Goin' Home
 
Thinking about thoughts of ending a life
God I know, I know it wasn't right
I pleaded for help, why would they've listened
My problems, they wouldn't get 'em

Understanding, it's not what you think
To see is to beleive, but that's not true 'cause
First you must BE

Now, my friend, why can't you see
Me, I'm not who you think
For you know only my outside

So now
This is the day, this is that night
My days will end, goodbye my friend
I've seen the world, and oh it's so cold
Now I must leave
To a better place of everlasting life

How is the end?
What will I see?
To be blind by light
Or the rest of my life?

You've been good to me, but all else have left
I wish you no pain, 'cause you're better than that
Someday we'll meet again, my dear friend

Now I do this, I'm ready to leave
Don't be sad, 'cause I'm goin' home
Away from what I can't endure

I say
This is the day, this is that night
My days will end, goodbye my friend
I've seen the world, and oh it's so cold
Now I must leave
To a better place of everlasting life

I said
This is the day, this is that night
Our days will end, come home my friend
Someday we'll leave
To a better place of everlasting life

I'm goin' away, my day has come
Don't try n' stop my, 'cause I'm ready for home
You can't stop me, 'cause I'm goin' home

It's not the best, but oh well. Is it okay, or bad?

creedsister 12-30-2003 05:58 PM

very Intriging~~saxon

Creed_Defaultgirl 12-31-2003 01:24 AM

Thanks, it's not that good though. I think I've got a writers block or something....

Dogstar 12-31-2003 01:28 AM

No, it's not bad, it's very cool! I love this part:

Understanding, it's not what you think
To see is to beleive, but that's not true 'cause
First you must BE

Creed_Defaultgirl 12-31-2003 01:31 AM

Kinda funny, cuz I thought it was corny! Oh well, most of it was. It has meaning, it just came out in a wierd way.

Dogstar 12-31-2003 01:33 AM

Keep on writing. It's not corny at all! You have some great observations and I like reading your stuff! Thanks for sharing!

Creed_Defaultgirl 12-31-2003 01:40 AM

Oh yeah, I got a favor, kinda if someone is kind enough to help me out. I have a real good friend who isn't saved. I tried to get her to talk to someone from her church, but I think she's scared. I've sent her some verses, and tried to talk to her about it a few times, but she just kinda droped the subject. I know I should post this in faith/religion, but oh well. I don't know exactly what to do. I want to help her, I'm just having a little trouble. Is it possible someone knows some really good bible verses, song verses, anything that might help me?? I've got some Creed stuff I've thought about. And if someone has a poem or anything that might do some good, please pm me or something! Anything will help! I think she's avoiding God for some reason, I don't really understand why, but does anyone have any advice that I can give to her, or you can give to me so that I can help her a little better???
Thanks guys.............Saxon

JulieCitySlicker 12-31-2003 03:10 AM

That was very good :D :)

Creed_Defaultgirl 12-31-2003 03:03 PM

Thanks Julie! ;)


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